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Screnzy: Complete
30 April 2010 | Filed Under Script Frenzy, Updates
As of 9:10 pm Wednesday night, I have finished Script Frenzy.
Whoa.
I feel proud, obviously. And accomplished. Scripts aren’t my usual thing, but I liked trying it out. And crazily, it wasn’t as hard as I thought it would be.
Oh sure, it’s a lot to write, and the deadline’s always an impressive motivator, but I felt it went so much faster than 50,000 words for a novel.
I know there are huge problems with my first draft of Too Many Princesses but who cares?! It’s a freaking first draft, and it’s complete!
Here’s an excerpt for you to enjoy. For your convenience, I’ve added the characters’ corresponding fairy tale in brackets. Prince Charming and Miranda [the Little Mermaid] are standing in the hall when:
Charming! Finally, I’ve been looking all over for you!
(ROSE [Beauty and the Beast] enters.)
Aren’t you supposed to be in the guest wing?
Like that’s going to stop us. Your Highness, I was hoping you would have tea with me.
(nervously)
No, I’m fine.
You’re missing out. I brew a mean rosehip.
(CHARMING is about to respond, but RAPUNZEL cuts him off.)
Lay off will you, he said he didn’t want to.
Chill, jailbird. It’s what those of us in the outside world call persuasion.
Now hang on a second -
No, I’m pretty sure it’s called harassment.
(SNOWFLAKE [Snow White] enters.)
Knock it off.
What’s going on?
(to himself)
It’s a bloody madhouse!
I’m just asking if Charming would like some of my rosehip tea.
But I’m allergic to tea!
I wasn’t asking you!
Nobody wants your stupid tea!
(MIRANDA [Little Mermaid] is fuming. CHARMING asides to her.)
If I leave, do you think they’ll notice?
Stop shouting!
(MIRANDA [Little Mermaid] storms off-stage.)
My tea is the pride of the duchy.
What? What’d I say?
Oh please, my hair was the pride of the -
(RAPUNZEL shrieks when ROSE pulls her hair.)
Nobody cares about your dumb hair!
Let go of me!
(ROSE [Beauty and the Beast] and RAPUNZEL tussle.)
Stop it!
(CHARMING glances cautiously at the princesses, and then quickly leaves. OLIVE [Princess and the Pea] and NARCISSA [Sleeping Beauty] enter. OLIVE [Princess and the Pea] nearly runs into the fighting girls, and leaps out of the way to avoid getting hit. NARCISSA [Sleeping Beauty] whistles loudly, and the fighting stops.)
What in the Gingerbread Man’s name is going on here?
(ROSE [Beauty and the Beast], RAPUNZEL, and SNOWFLAKE [Snow White] start talking at once.)
I just wanted to have some time with Prince Charming and give him a taste of my tea, then this Tower Snob tries to –
Stockholm Syndrome here was insulting Charming, and she insulted my hair, she was pulling on it, and –
They were fighting, I couldn’t stop them. I tried, but they wouldn’t listen, and then they were screaming and it hurt –
Shut up!
(to herself)
This is embarrassing on so many levels.
(to the others)
Listen up! I don’t want to see any more of this despicable behavior. Just because we are rivals for the prince’s love does not mean we have to lose our self-control.
(pause)
So from now on, if you want to make your point, you’ll do it on the down low, behind everyone’s back.
(The princesses exchange glances or glares for a few dramatic moments. ELLA [Cinderella] pokes her head in.)
Has anyone seen my shoe?
End of Scene
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I really liked this excerpt. It made me laugh, haha. It was really, really helpful to have the name of the story next to the characters names, too – I definitely didn’t know some of their names at first.
Thanks! Good thing I didn’t just note the fairy tales one time then. It wouldn’t do to confuse the readers!
Yay!
I didn’t read any of it, yet at least, for obvious reasons :p Are you happy enough with it to think about trying to shop it around?
In due time. Not as it is right now, but maybe after a few rounds of beta readers and revisions. Not sure who would buy it though. (When I was writing it I was thinking high school play material.) I can ask my playwright friend, he’s shopping around with his work too.